Showing posts with label erasure poem. Show all posts
Showing posts with label erasure poem. Show all posts

Thursday, 9 April 2026

8 - Erasing Eris

Things you need to know:

  1. Eris is the unpleasant, bitter, Greek deity of Chaos and Discord.
  2. This took me for-bloody-ever…

#NaPoWriMo Day 8 and yesterday I sculpted an erasure poem, inspired by a prompt of “Eridanus”, courtesy of my handy-dandy randomised prompts-and-topics spreadsheet. And, being me, I went a bit extra with it all (we’re all astonished, I know), and decided that the thing I would be erasing would be the entire bloody Wikipedia article, and then, in order for the audio version to match the spirit of the visual version, that I would record me reading the entire bloody Wikipedia article aloud and cut the concomitant bits out of the recording for authenticity.

I can certainly say I’ve learned some things, though what they might be, only time can tell… (The image description for this is going to be… special, for one…)

Remember that, if you’re a subscriber to my Patreon, you can hear a recording of this piece (and the seven preceding it) there. And it is certainly an experience! The link to the relevant post is here: https://www.patreon.com/posts/erasing-eris-155174189


Two halves of the redacted article side-by-side:
The top half of the Wikipedia article on the constellation Eridanus. Every line has one or more black redaction marks on it, including the three graphics. Some are blacked out altogether. The word Eridanus is repeatedly redacted to read Eris, and all the names on the graphics have been redacted. There's even a big, black rectangle entirely covering something - probably the quick facts table - on the right of the page. The three graphics, from top right downwards, are 1. A greyscale map that gives the appearance of being of the lower tip of a tapering landmass, even though constellations are dotted around it (with their names redacted); 2. A dark blue night sky with the writhing river of the Eridanus (redacted to Eris) drawn on in pale lines, above a flat piece of ground with trees on it. The caption has been entirely blacked out. 3. A digital rendering of a red and white ringed planet and its distant star in the background. The angle makes it look like someone wearing a jaunty hat. You can access the text in the recording on Patreon, and may the gods help you.The lower half of the Wikipedia article on the constellation Eridanus. Every line has one or more black redaction marks on it, including the three graphics. Some are blacked out altogether. This page is less crowded, so the unredacted words stand out more clearly for being given room to breathe in. About halfway down the page, on the left-hand side, is a repulsive creature that looks like it was the subject of illegal genetic experimentation, and is cognisant enough to know its fleshy, fish-tailed, mole-pawed, hairless, beige body and green-scaly, orange-jowly face are going to leave it lonely forever. There are other, smaller figures around it that look a lot more geometrical and a lot less horrified pity-inducing.  You can access the text in the recording on Patreon, and may the gods help you.

Or, if you’d like to see the whole darned thing in a oner:
A combined version of both the above and the original edit, if you must know. Not really much point in putting anything new in the alt-text, though! Scroll back up if you want the details; listen to the Patreon recording if you like torturing yourself. Thanks for popping by!

Fine, I’ll have pity on you – here’s the version rendered into plain words:

Eris stretches along the south.
It is a river. It remains one of the
real features of the blue-white years,
whose tradition means “the end”.

Peculiar observations indicate poles
spinning extremely rapidly.
The noteworthy Beta tradition called
a blue-white Earth. Its foot gives
indistinguishable amateurs primary
binary magnitude; visible, divisible:
a triple system consisting of an
orange main star,
a white dwarf,
and a red dwarf.

The maga is easily visible white.
The maga have a period of 50 years.
Artists impress, ran –
one extra orange-hued star,
one planet, a period of 7 years.

Supervoid cold spot is large
(devoid of gaies),
meter superseded only by
speculation that the void may be
due to quantum entanglement
between our universe and another.

Deep-sky visible in small amateurs
with large instruments
light the northeast. Eris is a faint reflection,
an ancient remnant illuminated by grand design.
barred gays center an unusual structure:
a grand design spiral that exists tightly wound.

The Nu Eris shower radiate cons every year;
the parent is unidentified.
Another peaks, dips his paws into Eris;
this mirror depicts a river,
flowing into the south.
According to one theory, the marsh is
held sacred to the domain of the Abyss:
a myth of the father, no strength to control
and so veers, scorching both Earth and heaven.
Zeus intervene and cast him to the burning river!

Eris cannot be seen from China.
The White Tiger of the West was
classified knowledge of western stars.
Citation needed.

Sunday, 2 April 2017

2017.2 - Article Erasure

This is an erasure poem. Source: full text


Dear, last year,
The Kingdom voted to leave.

As I said: rejection,
an attempt to do harm.
The contrary Kingdom wants to succeed.
Instead, we are leaving,
and we want friends.

Earlier, the Kingdom
confirmed the result of the convincing act.
Today I am writing the decision of the people.
I hereby withdraw,
I hereby withdraw.

This letter should therefore include
the approach of Government to
discussions about the
deep and special partnership
we hope to enjoy once we leave.
(We believe in the interests only of the Kingdom).

In the best interests of the Kingdom
We should process disruption on each side.
We want to remain strong and prosperous
and capable of threats.
We want the Kingdom,
a deep and special partnership,
a strong withdrawal.

The Government wants ambition,
giving citizens third world certainty
as early as possible.

I would like some principles,
but I will be undertaking legislation
that will repeal certainty for citizens
and will consult White businesses.
We will, of course, continue to remain until we leave.

From the start,
we will negotiate one Kingdom,
taking dues of every nation and region.
When it comes, to return powers to the Kingdom,
we will fly on powers to Scotland,
Wales, and Northern Ireland.
But the...
The Government...
The outcome...
This significant increase,

The power...

The Kingdom wants a deep and special withdrawal.
We leave trade security a failure,
weakened.
In this kind of scenario,
The Kingdom is not the outcome that either side should seek.
We must therefore work hard to that outcome.

We want a deep and special partnership,
taking security, but also because we want to play.
And we want to play.

Looking ahead,
I would like some principles
(as smooth as possible.)

I... We should engage with one spirit.
(Sincere Prime Minister!)
I have listened carefully to you,
and that is why the Kingdom does not seek respect -
there can be no consequences;
we know that we will lose.

We know that rules agreed...
I. I. We should always put our citizens first.
We remember the heart of citizens,
And we aim to strike their rights.

I, I, I.
We want a deep and special partnership.
We will determine fair law,

but we believe in disruption as much as possible.
Investors – want!
Plan order!
Avoid peace!

We want to avoid countries,
to be able to harm the Republic.
We also have to make sure that nothing is done.

(We should prioritise.
Agreeing will be bold and ambitious.
Greater scope covers evolution
of a fair and open environment;
the partnership between us deep, broad, and dynamic.
We should share,

perhaps now more than ever.)

We want to play:
strong and prosperous
and projecting threats.

I want a deep and special partnership,
taking growth.
Protectionist instincts are on the rise.
Likewise: weakening prosperity and protection of our citizens.
The Kingdom’s objectives remain White.

It will be a challenge,
but we believe it is necessary.
We start from trust,
cooperation set back decades.
It is for these reasons
that the task should be beyond us.

(After all, the institutions and the leaders of the Union succeeded in bringing together a continent blighted by war into a union of peaceful nations.)

I know we are capable of departing
a deep and special partnership.